base689 0 #1 July 31, 2014 Hello there. My 2 friends, who are Phoenix-Fly wingsuit coaches, asked me to translate from Italian into English the text they have already got on a stamp to be printed on students's logbook once they have successfully passed their wingsuit course. I translated it at the best of my knowledge, but I would appreciate if you could revise/correct the following text as if yourself would use it on a stamp for a US run wingsuit course Thanks so much Best Regards base689 The candidate has successfully passed the Phoenix-Fly First Jump Course, has proved to have learned the basics of safety with a beginner level wingsuit and has learned notions about the usage of intermediate level wingsuits.Stay safe out there Blue Skies and Soft Walls BASE #689 - base_689AT_NO_123_SPAMyahoo.com Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ridebmxbikes 0 #2 July 31, 2014 Sounds good to me! Very smooth but formal. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
base689 0 #3 July 31, 2014 Thank you so much, it's very kind of you Stay safe out there Blue Skies and Soft Walls BASE #689 - base_689AT_NO_123_SPAMyahoo.com Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy9o8 2 #4 July 31, 2014 My native language is American English. To me, the word "notions" as used in the sentence sounds awkward. I would recommend replacing it with "concepts" and/or "basic theory". Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jbag 0 #5 July 31, 2014 base689Hello there. My 2 friends, who are Phoenix-Fly wingsuit coaches, asked me to translate from Italian into English the text they have already got on a stamp to be printed on students's logbook once they have successfully passed their wingsuit course. I translated it at the best of my knowledge, but I would appreciate if you could revise/correct the following text as if yourself would use it on a stamp for a US run wingsuit course Thanks so much Best Regards base689 The candidate has successfully passed the Phoenix-Fly First Jump Course, has proved to have learned the basics of safety with a beginner level wingsuit and has learned notions about the usage of intermediate level wingsuits. "Cleared to buy a Squirrel Aura." would work just the same :)IHYD Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
thex2000 0 #6 July 31, 2014 That's very good, I might just shift a few things around. Something like this perhaps: "This candidate has successfully passed the Phoenix-Fly First Jump Course. They have successfully learned the safety basics with a beginner level wingsuit and have also learned the usage concepts of intermediate level wingsuits." Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
